From the sleeper, she could hear the truck downshifting, and awoke with a start.
He was sitting on her chest. The fat, bald, truck driver- the one that had offered to take her as far as Memphis- was sitting on her chest. Straddling her. His thick legs holding her arms tight at her sides.
“Come on now. Take it..”
She did.
What else could she do? He was sitting on her chest.
When he was done- he was done.. He wanted her out of the truck…
She would have stayed… She had nowhere to go… It was dark..
Word Count: 98
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I like how you’ve left it unsaid. Her chest, of course, could contain her treasure. Though I think we all know her treasure is stashed at the nether end. Good story.
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Thank you so much. Paring this down, and yet maintaining the integrity of the scene was tricky.
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A ‘trick’ you pulled off to perfection.
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Horrific, and grim, and written so well with restraint.
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Thank you Iain, that means a lot coming from you. 😄
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Left me with the ickiest feeling. Yuck. lol. Good work.
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Then I did my job. Thank you
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Well done. Conveyed the horror without having to go into any great detail.
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Thank you Tina
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Great piece Violet, powerful and succinct left me riveted to the scene, as horrible as it was.
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Thank you Michael. I appreciate your input her much.
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oops. That was supposed to say very much..
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This was so powerful and horrifying and left me feeling like I need to take a shower to wash the grime off me. But this was exceptionally well done, to be able to write a scene like that but not go too much in the details, to have enough restraint to let the scene play out in each of our heads as we would imagine it without directing it for us, it’s truly just so well done, Violet.
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Thank you so much Jade. I am so happy it came across so well.
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Brutal!
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Glad to hear you thought so!
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Excellent writing, very well done.
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Thank you so much for thinking and saying so..
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It’s interesting to see how disgusting I can imagine this by simply a few lines. I also feel pretty bad for the main character, having nowhere to go and thinking that this horror is the best she can get!
Nice!
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Thank you so much for picking up on her not having anywhere else to go. That was important to me.
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