
Ezra cradled the empty Budweiser bottle in his left hand as he concentrated on extricating the metallic glazed label off the sweaty brown bottle with his right- all the while placating himself by thinking, “If the damn thing comes off in one piece I go home, eat crow and tell her she’s right. And if it don’t…” -problem was, he hadn’t quite figured out what the ‘and if it don’t’ course of action was- before the center of the label stuck solid and ripped away from the edges, he had so cleanly liberated.
“You ready for another un over there, Tiger?” Kaitlyn, the twenty-something pink haired, tattooed college student who had just recently taken up tending bar a couple afternoons a week asked as she made her way over to the beer cooler, pausing for his response before sliding the lid back into the refrigerated chest with a whoosh of rubber flashing gliding atop the units cool steel exterior, “Or are ya aimin’ to just play with that un all afternoon?”
“Lemme ask ya somethin’,” Ezra started hesitantly, pausing as he gathered his thoughts into a bundle before continuing, “Whadda think is more important, havin’ a guy that you know, is loyal to ya, would do anything for ya, ok, even loves ya, or one that might do any or all them things when it’s convenient, but fer sure is always gonna bring home a paycheck?”
“Ok, lemme ask you somethin’,” Kaitlyn countered with a smirk, as she tucked a long shock of pink bang behind one ear whilst snapping the lid cleanly off an ice cold Budweiser longneck with the other, “What exactly is this loving, loyal, do anything for ya type guy doing all day while he ain’t workin’ and the old lady is slaving away making the money that keeps a roof over his head? Cookin’- cleanin’- and fixin’ her dinner or hangin’ out here drinkin’ beer?”
“I woun’d say that’s a fair question.” Ezra countered as Kaitlyn set the frosty bottle of beer on a fresh bar-nap directly in front of him. “I didn’t say nothin’ about that- I’m serious now, this here’s a real question!”
Just then the bar door swung open and a blinding bolt of sunlight punctuated the midday darkness immediately obfuscating anything that may or may not have resembled ‘real’ in the seconds before. “Line ’em up there, Kaityn,” Trever roared as he entered, “I’m a buyin’!”
This is my entry for this week’s Six Sentence Story. The word prompt this week was Wound.
Kaitlyn nailed it! 😂 Saved by Trever 😎
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I’m thinkin’ she did!
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Love the way you handle dialogue in this piece.
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Thank you. I hear the voices that way, and then it would be sacrilegious almost not to write them in kind.
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Maybe this music/video of a Tom Waits song will do as my response, Violet … 😍🎵
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A very appropriate song, as I did in fact fall in love with this man once, long ago and far away….
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Way to go Kaitlyn.
Nicely done Violet!
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Thank you. This was a fun one.
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Always my pleasure Violet
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It looks like Trevor is going to keep them busy for a while.
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He might as well the moment of truth is gone now. Thanks for stopping by, Frank.
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I liked this story except for the end
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Why didn’t you like the end?
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It left me hanging who the heck was Trevor ?
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Does it matter? He was buying!
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To me I suppose it does, otherwise it wax an engaging story.
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Exactly right.
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Why do we always try to suss out the meanings of life when we’re two sheets to the wind?
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Because we are too busy plotting and planning the rest of the time I guess….
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Excellent writing, Violet!
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I had fun. I love writing in dialect, and this was the first time I was able to use that tool in answering a prompt. Win Win in my book.
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Great job! I love how you weave perfect stories within the given guidelines. It showcases your impressive command of writing prowess.
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I just love doing it and I think that’s what shows
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Damn if Ezra doesn’t already know the answer to his question. Methinks he’s asking the wrong question.
As for new bartender Kaitlyn, she’s yet to realize that all the meaningful questions she might pose or advice offered (to all the Ezras), winds up lost between one bottle to the next.
Good Six, Violet.
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This was just such typical bar room jibber I had to break it up and get back to business aka Trever – and yep his mama wasn’t good at spelling.. hehehe
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enjoyed! could picture it exactly as written. 🙂
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That is exactly what I was going for! Thank you so much for stopping by, and welcome to my little corner of the world!
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“I woun’d say that’s a fair question.” Ezra countered“
aiiiy-fricken-yeee this is the best use** of the prompt word I’ve seen yet!
**manifestation, permutation
https://youtu.be/jjaqrPpdQYc?feature=shared
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Congratulations! You are the first to even notice! I really enjoyed being able to use it as a piece of dialect.
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Kaitlyn is wise.
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Yes she is. Too bad her logic got derailed by a free beer.
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You are a consummate storyteller, Violet. I felt like I was a fly on the wall, taking it all in. Kudos.
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You are too kind. I certainly enjoy doing it though.
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lol now I wanna know the answer!
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Girl you know that bird has flown somebody bought him a beer!
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Cheers was never like this! And thank God for bartenders like Kaitlynn. Woody Boyd might not have been so blunt, but Woody Harrelson would!
Very vivid storytelling!
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So glad you enjoyed it!
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