The epitome
Of naivety lingers
Only long enough
To hone the fated spike-
with which youth is impaled
A car pulls up alongside the bench, on which I’m sitting. He rolls down the window, smiles, and asks me if I’m ok. I tell him yes- not realizing my youthful demeanor betrays me- he knows I am alone, and have no place to stay.
I get in the car and we make the necessary small talk. Just long enough for the inevitable proposition to be made. And even though I know all along it’s coming, it takes a moment for me to translate what he’s saying.
I do my best to answer nonchalantly- to act as if I do this every day. I tell myself, ‘Just shut up and do it! You need the money. There IS no other way.”
Triumphant! I check into the room, I can afford now. I feel like god! -until I am alone behind the door.
By necessity
forged, of molten circumstance
Sexualities
misguided invocation-
Casts a formidable tool
In response to Coleen’s Tanka Tuesday. #synonyms only for slow and work. my choices are italicized.
Special thanks to Misky’s Twiglet #111 phrase- behind the door
And Eugenia at BrewNSpew Cafe for the weekly prompt- epitome
That’s dark. A desperate story, told so sparely.
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I didn’t think the details would bring anything more to the story, they might even have detracted. I am glad the sense of desperation translated so well.. Thank you so much for stopping in and commenting.
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Again, told as it is. I admire that. 🙂
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Thanks again. I am so ready for Diana to post her speculative fiction challenge so I can immerse myself in fiction. I’m ready for a break from the expository poetry for a minute..
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Only a minute? Though I do like your poetry.
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poor witch, but great poem!
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I really like the single-view narrative of this poem. Well done, and thanks for joining in this week.
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This is my second attempt at a haibun. I’m pleased with the way it worked out. Thank you for the wonderful prompt!
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Reblogged this on BrewNSpew.
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Brilliant piece, Violet, and I love your approach to the haibun. Thank you for joining the challenge. 🙂
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Thank you Eugenia. I am thrilled to be here!
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This is so sad and disturbing, and I imagine it’s true to many young people’s experience. So provocative, Violet. Powerful writing.
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I assure you it’s true. And I’m hoping a bit of a window into the mind of this girl… Thank you for being here.
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Reluctance, desperation and acceptance came across well.
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Thank you so much for the kind words. I’m glad it resonated with you.
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Into what trades and professions do we go blindly or with open eyes.
A sad state, interpreted boldly pushing the envelope that some cannot escape.
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Just a little eindoe into my world. Thanks for the kind words Jules.
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Very clever! I love your opening stanza.
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Violet, Your Haibun and Tanka are exactly what I’m talking about by assuming a persona. Your words are powerful and you’ve conveyed an experience like no other. I’m so impressed with your writing. ❤
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Why thank you Collen, coming from you that makes me feel as if I have really accomplished something. I cherish the time I spend in pursuit of my entry for your weekly challenge.
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Now, that makes me feel wonderful. Thank you. I do enjoy these challenges, too. ❤
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Excellent writing, though sad, it is a reality in today’s world.
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I enjoy the window into my world appeal of poetry like this. Thank you for enjoying it with me Helene,,,
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Thank you the ever lovely Eugenia for the link! ;looking forward to this week.
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So sad. The spare telling of this makes it more poignant. We do what we need to do to get by. It is both a personal story and also the story of many young women (and men).
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Holy smokes! In a good way:)
Pat
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So glad you enjoyed it, Pat. Nice to have you here..
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Just seen this; brilliant.
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Thank you Antoinia.
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